Needs editing. Will re-post after editing.

sum_off,
hmm.... "Giving is LOSING" huh (O:

now my questions
1. I believe u never mentioned this duded before "Canadian Lacrosse player". Another one of her rich dudes... whose earning/earthly posessions she vanquished (O:

2. I believe that Jimmy carter is the only us president who visited Nepal. [ but that happened around 1985, i believe]... so what is the relationship here ... what is the insinuation? Carter is a philanthropist.. so, r ya trying to create a complementary reference .. i am kinda lost here.....

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PS.. i thought u were mad @ me for that email (O:

Not meaning to take anything away from your writing talents, I found the final episode - anti climatic.

The actual event from where most of the flashbacks occurred was not given the importance it deserved. I thought the flashbacks were building up for something more than a mere handing of the award.

“So that pathway basically serves as a red carpet to the goddess?”
I didn't find the statement so clever as to make that reference. “Exactly! Well said. I’m gonna use that as reference in the future. Can I steal it?”

Makes me stipulate if the writer was in haste to finish the story off. How do you enjoy an expensive rug at the shrink's or even at your own place when you're being psycho analyzed?

In his ingenuity at portraying small intricate details, the writer loses sight of the big picture, making one hungry for an alternative ending of sorts.

Paralysis of Analysis vaneko chai yehi ho.

Sum off well anyways...nice writing.....

but what about tyo arko..ko part 8 and more, that you were suppose to write after you come back from your honeymoon.

I did not know a female can be so ruthless.

Nice portray, sum off.

need to read it all over again.... :-(

Sum off bro,
Simply, brilliant. However, it felt like you were forced to end it. It could have been more descriptive.

I absoultely loved the ending ..Couldn't have it done better!!!!Great job!!!

Very well written Sum_off… Great Job!

I don’t know much about Freud, but have heard that he traces every behavior to the mother. Your story corroborates to his theory.

And Thapap, I think the lacrosse player was the one who died in the car accident with Orangutan.

Well done Sum_Off

You have once again entertained the sajhaites with your amazing creativity !!!

What happened to "_____ day in Nepal" journals ???

Good Job Dude

Ok sum_off. You need to do some explanation of your story's ending dude.
What is the link between her finding the pen, Jimmy Carter, Giving is Losing, and events in her life?

can we have some more...this isn't fiction is it??

Sum Off..

Very well written. Your narration of this character depicts how ruthless and heartless someone can be. But again people tend to learn what their parents teaches them and how they grow up. Her mother teaching: Giving is losing - so there is where Divyeswori learned all her Taandab.

I feel what divye.. is today is just because of her mom.Her mom should have told her she couldn't keep other's stuff no matter how valuable it was; instead she stopped a young innocent child from returning that pen.Ms pande was just like any other innocent,non maupulative,honnest kid when she was young but she got a wrong guidence.We all know our first school is our home and our first teacher is our mom.But unluckily her first teacher was manupulative,greedy,dishonest,cunning and ms pande turned just like her teacher ,her own mom.
But I pity on those kind of people.I don't think they will be happy in the long run.Even look at Ms Pande,her life is hollow,no truth and absolutely false.Getting money by hurting others will never bring happiness ;I think even divyes....is not happy deep inside her.
But this ending is not upto my expectation.Maybe I didn't understand this last part.Or maybe a lot of hindi movies (I used to watch a lot of hindi movies,even now if I get time I do) made me think in a different way.
But whatever story wants to tell us,I like the way sum_off puts his words and sentences.Keep writing.I'm looking forward many stories or essays from u.Kuddos to u!!

Sum_off,I think I miss your days in Nepal.Now I 'm interested.Can u pls give me websight for those so that I can read your 1st,2nd...........days in Nepal too?
Thankyou

Waited till the last part to sing the praise....
Very well written indeed..... but as others I think I am missing some threads...
This is my understanding of the last part:
The ugly girl Ms. Pandey sees in her dreams in the self percecption of herself trying satiate her mothers wishes while she puts herself in the shoes of her mother i.e. She is her mother and the ugly child is herself?? Where does Jimmy Carter fits in the story? and ofcourse this young man who looks like Jimmy Carter??

sum off,

I will tell u why u are better than us lesser mortals.

"......verified the man who still looked like a young Jimmy Carter."

"......asked the mercenary healer who later charged the woman for his questions."

The fact that u can come up with such sentences proves that u are gifted. I cant
do that and thats the reason I am not writing on sajha.There's however a very thin line
between being a genius and not making much sense. Watch out for that.

What i take away from your story is that: Divyeswori is the person she is, because she
had a mother that she had. (Phew!! EVerything in fiction has to have a reason haina??
...nobody can be mean on thier own account, not atleast in fiction)

But the greater lesson to me from this story is the title of the story itself. Case 1273.
That after a lifetime of scheming and plotting and manipulating and achieving...this is
what it boils down to. That divyeswori pandey has become a case. this is what she has to show for a lifetime lived.

And I also noticed that you have one hell of a imagination. That is the most important
asset of a writer, by far, in my opinion.

Having said all of this, is the conclusion of the story somewhat of a letdown? Yeah,
a little bit. I found it a wee bit rushed. And please dont make us draw conclusions
on divye's state of mind on the basis of that one dream alone. That is not enough.
Especially after all that background.

BUt please keep on writing. If they opened a fan club for you....I would be the first to
sign up. And like everybody else I too am waiting for the .....days of nepal.

ok I read your days in nepal till 7th episode.Good one.Enjoyed thoroughly .waiting for your 7th episode..................

sum_off bro..........to be honest i didnt get the last part. the first three had a marvellous flow of incidents and the characters were manipulated in a well defined way. but what happened to this part.my view is that u could ahve done more then this...........but anyways ur writings are brilliantly written.......there is no way i can write this better.........good job bro............looking for some more writings of urs.and by the way what bout ur sequel of ur visit to nepal. do post them too........

peace

the ending couldn't have been any better.

dami cha bro!!!