Haven't read it, but liked the title. Just bumped it so I will read it later.

Nice one well written and very creative........add more please.

 Homeyji, Gyanendra's wife is Komal not Prekchyaa as you have stated twice !!

Tero baaje,

Thanks.

Bhaktedai,

Good catch! I've made the correction. Thanks for the feedback.

kati lamo katha voli padchu a sachhi girijo pani ti thyo haina?

Dude,
    Awesome job ! Undoubtedly dis could be your masterpiece if worked hard.... 
               As of my insight... I was clear at the beginning but the more I sinked in..  the more I lost myself.. ..possibly I might be wrong but felt as if you blew it somewhere & when I wanted somemore, you were already on the next page.. It was more like a tea party to me you know I mean & you slacked the climax.. I hope you will come up with a better verison that will be more complete...
Also gud luck and keep up ur good work & beaware that lotta ignorant jus' blabbers in here.. hope you won't be doomed with their ignorance...
    Bottom line: my advice is to push you forward not backward... Regards  (amx)

Aap Bhi Naa,

You've given me the best crique and review so far. You're right, it needs more work and polishing. Great constructive criticism. Keep it coming, my friend. Thanks for the vote of confidence.